I wish I could sit with you day after day
sinking into your arms and feeling okay.
When I think about all we have overcome
these feelings inside are leaving me numb
Being in love with you has left me breathless
you steal my thoughts with a single caress.
Bring me closer to your everlasting love
You fit inside me like a sensuous glove
You and I will outlive those pains of sorrow
just as long as you are with me tomorrow.
I can see us growing old together in the future
you alone can always mend my heart like a suture.
We will forever be the ones who are together
be it rain or snow or the worst of weather.
My love, I can only tell you that I won the prize
I see the love shine through the reality in your eyes.
Midnight Raeven
October 3, 2009
4:25 PM
Author notes
Title Number 494... Reality in your Eyes.
A contest entry
- ♥1000 Titles (Rhyme only)♥ #3 by Ami.
550 points, ended October 18, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think!
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Touching and Romantic
First, may I congradulate you on your marriage and the blessings of eternal love. This piece allows the reader to see just how blessed you are. Your rhyming was imaginative, creative and smooth. Congrats. on the silver trophy as well
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Thank you! I was trying to get outside the box with my rhyming on this one b/c sometimes I feel that they can be forced or not well done, but this one came out pretty good.
Thanks again!
Midnight Raeven
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I like the stars blinking in the backgrounds, they serve as a bond between magic and reality, just like the poem shows the magic or love, but the reality of it too.
Really beautiful! And your rhymes were well-done! ^-^
Great job.
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Thank you for reading my poem! I was feeling neglected since not many people are reading my poems anymore.
I am happy to see that you liked my rhymes, sometimes they feel forced though. Hopefully this one wasn't.
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wonderful, simple and honestly wonderful, keep it flowing
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