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Evening Shadows Fall

Beyond the seven seas,
Past the mountains so tall,
Is a secret haven
Where evening shadows fall.

Curtaining the haven in a lavender veil,
It descends-- a violet mist,
Changing it to a mystical place
Where rocks glint like amethyst.

The plants and flowers become lilac
The lakes like tinted glass.
The waterfalls'  spray is foamy mauve,
The sun a plum-colored brass.

Slowly it sinks behind the cliff-range
And the sky darkens to a shade of the night.
Stars sparkle like diamonds against purple velvet,
Obscuring the smallest sight.

Yet one figure alone stands out from the rest,
Despite the dark it is white.
Its coat is untouched by the falling shadows,
And it's motionless in a ray of moonlight.

Hooves of marble,
An ivory horn,
Two starlit eyes,
A unicorn.

She is poised on the shore
And the waves sweep past her hooves.
She stands with delicate beauty
And graceful fluid when she moves.

Silently she gallops across the coastline,
A star in the purple-blackness of night.
Her head is erect with unbounded pride,
Her mane is entangled with light.

She splashes through a river of stars,
Her body elegant and tall.
She dips her long horn and begins to drink as
Around her evening shadows fall.

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  • Kathraina silver member
    October 16

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    WOW!!! Stunning imagery throughout this piece, I absolutely love the tale you've woven here. The rhyme is flawless here as well.

    bravo and thank you for entering



    ♥ kate


  • breannawilliams
    October 3

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    This is really good! And I can't believe you're so young! You must be very imaginative, and you have a wonderful talent!


  • bullhorn
    October 3

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    i love it. u could really do this for a living. i love the part that said
    'She is poised on the shore
    And the waves sweep past her hooves.
    She stands with delicate beauty
    And graceful fluid when she moves.'

    this was a perfect poem


  • h e a v e n
    October 3
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    wow..words from beauty..


  • Denerica
    October 3

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    Wow...you are only 12! this piece is astounding, you must be a gifted student, the words come out like an adults would, wonderful imagery, simply beautiful. Awesome. Blessings.

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