Vaguely lit by the summer moon, that runs pierced with blue light;
I dream to taste the sweet nectar that is your lips,
For you smell of innocence, and sugar.
Is it wrong to be so tempted by the devil?
To want you so bad that I would disregard everything
Just to lie in your arms;
For they look so tempting.
On blue summer evenings I lie under the shimmering stars,
I dream of pearly white smiles,
Entrancing blue eyes,
Feather soft touches,
And whispered I love you’s.
When the stars start to sleep,
Taking my comforting blue blanket with them,
I refuse to wake.
I dream of swirling shades of orange and blue
Dancing in the sky
I dream of waking up to your sweet face,
Looking at me with so much love
My heart grows wings and starts to fly away.
But when I open my eyes,
I'm disappointed to see;
That dreams are in fact better than reality.
There are no blue eyes staring into my soul.
There are no feather soft touches holding me tight to you.
There are no whispered I love you’s, just the soft whistle of the wind.
So I close my eyes and dream of you,
And secretly hope that somewhere out there,
Your looking at the morning sky
And thinking of me too.
Author notes
spades
this one is about a long distance relationship
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Well Worded
I have been in a long distance relationship, and I know exactly what this is like. To want to hold someone so dearly, or kiss them passionately on a warm summers night, this is a very well constructed poem. You appeal so well to emotion, to know what its like to miss somebody, and to not have them there. I loved this poem. The flow was good, but the structure was just a little broken. The only criticism i have is to even out your lines just a little. But besides that, tremendous job. -
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well thanky darlin... ill keep that in mind for next time
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This was just amazing. I am speechless. I am unsure on what too say. It was just good. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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Beautiful...what love endures when it waits. Romantic as well as showing your heart. Dreams can keep hope alive though. Like how you make it sound reality until the reader realizes its a dream. Excellent. Blessings.
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thankyou
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