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his smile




                                                his smile
                                          chips the lip of porcelain
                                                inlaying  my heart

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Haiku/Senryu in nature

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  • writeonhorses
    October 3

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    i am one of those people who loves reading haikus but needs to practice writing them. you have done a nice job with this write, i like the background too, adds an asian flair, and so does the word porcelain. i could really connect with this one, very direct and honest