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My Sea

I see my world shatter before me
Like an angry and hurt soul
Punching the mirror to find some way out

I can hear the strange, horrific music it makes
The sharp scrape of the glass on his bare skin
The thick drops of dark red blood slowly rolling down
Hitting the ground, each splash reflecting the heartache

I'm drowning in the sea of despair
I see a pair of golden hands on the surface of the water
The sun gleaming, happiness portrayed in a blurry picture
Reach.. reach.. just a little further!
Only to find out it was just an illusion

And yet I'm left alone to rot in there
Screaming, screeching, kicking, shaking
I sink further and further down with each try

I can't see the light anymore
It's escaped my eyesight and my willpower starts to
Vanish before my eyes, fading away

I can't breathe, I can't see, I can't move
The only thing left of me is my voice
Bubbles of shrill yells for freedom escape me
I don't recognize myself

Yet they hear me, but they don't listen
Yet I remain millimeters over self destruction
One more hit and I'm gone. Forever.

And the only self defense I had is taken away from me.

How can i get better? What do you think?

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  • 'S Perfectly Fine

    I love it! The descriptions, the words, I like it all. You are a very good poet.


  • Evinde
    October 3
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