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in every star... there is love



you weren’t the star
that shone most brightly
catching my eye
in the dead of night

you were the star beside it
nestled in the glow of another
that outshone all
in a midnight sky

as startled as I
shy smile, behind pained eyes
the perfect poem, spoken in silence
you captivated my heart
and made me whole

beyond the reflection
I see in your eyes
you are the cosmos
that captured all splendor
and me
in your own little world

teaching me
what true love
the darkest nights can hold


 

 

 

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Prompt ~when I found you, I found the reason for me

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  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 18
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    speechless! this is pure beauty!
    lovely my dear ss 

    love & blessings

    Rend


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    October 16
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    Thank You & Best of Luck


  • Desire gold member
    October 14

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    Bless Your Heart~

    Oh My this is a Beauty and You have a way with words
    that is so Unique~ just brings Food for the Soul
    Another Excellent example~ also this swells the eyes
    I could use flowing of diamonds~
    Metaphors Stunning!!


    Keep that quill dancing
    Thank You for sharing Your Voice
    Best wishes in the contest Precious One~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 7

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    Ah, the wise poet
    who sees the value
    in the shy non-glitzy star,
    who reveals true brightness
    to you...

    A truly wondrous piece
    in both style and messsage!

    M-C


  • wave1080
    October 7

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    awwww !

    i simply love this


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 7

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    Outstanding write of devotion, praise and love...your association with the stars is endearing..Best in the contest!


  • Yah-rod
    October 6

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    It was, of course, the first stanza that caught my eye

    Immediately, it directed my attention to another (created curiosity). You have conveyed a good image, and the words were like stars against a black background.

    The next is romantic, yet restrained: "shy smile...spoken in silence".

    "beyond the reflection/I see in your eyes" suggests that since she has now become 'whole', she can see herself as part of that cosmos that exists inside his eyes. A very wonderful image, because in your way, you are completing the other.

    A brilliant and romantic love poem.


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 4
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    Softly beautiful. Outstandingly written...


  • pixiestix gold member
    October 4

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    The bright stars so often aren't the "right" stars. I loved this entirely from the first line to the last.

    Best of luck in the contest.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 3

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    Wow; I am spellbound.

    You grip me in deeply here with your
    stunning, soft portrayals of truth,
    love, life, and the brilliance of it all.

    I swear if this does not win gold,
    the contest holder does not
    truly see the REAL winner.

    Well, you'll always be the real
    winner to me.. love you sis
    and my goodness do I love
    this write!!

    .. keep up the amazing work


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 3

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    Well spoken. I like this.


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 3

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    so true, i love the message of this poem...and i love the poem spoken in silence and how it feels when that happens ..i think this is so beautiful, and i was going to say the same thing as what Jackie said, i walked away with the same meaning from the poem..


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 3

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    Lovely take on the prompt
    Yeppers, finding the one true love
    fills the heart and soul like never before
    at last, one feels complete themselves...
    And as you say, that one may not be s
    tanding out above all the rest...
    he or she is that humble one waiting to find love

    wish you the best of luck in the contest
    Keep your talented quill dancing
    Much love my dear friend (better yet Sis)

    David


  • Forever more yours
    October 3

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    Simple,yet meaningful.

    Oh wow,this is one of a kind. I love it! It's beautiful. I love your workk. Would you like to exchange reads sometime? I'd love too have such a good poet review my work.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 3

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    This is very beautifully penned, so full of wonderful depth amnd inagery. Best wishes in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 3

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    Oh so gorgeous! The imagery used is just perfect her hun. Sometimes it's the ones that don't catch our attention at first that turn out to be the ones who should!

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