As I sadly drift
towards the mist,
I feel the cold stones
creep into my bones.
Love arrived and flourished
Then in a whirl vanished.
Now as I face myself to say
“Broke your heart, babe.”
I wonder at how one could be so cruel
As to claim love and then continue
To create despair as homeless he has left me
Due to me believing his lies, unfortunately.
In a list
A contest entry
- So What I'm Still A RockStar!!!!!!!! 8] by Anjole-Of-The-Artz.
2500 points, ended November 30, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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By the way that picture is beautiful and it fits with that one line very well "Love arrived and flourished
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Okay the poem isn't bad, but it was supposed to be cheerful....I do like it but I'm not sure I could give you a trophy just because it's not really what I was looking for. I can however if you the claps you deserve for wonderful expression!
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Such sadness and melancholy you've put in this write, taken the prompt as it is and gave it life. Liked the rhyme or hints of rhyme (sorry, I am not a pro in rhyme, can't pronounce a word to save my life lol).
However, I like how you made it sound conversational and deep. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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~Noor -
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thank you
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This is a really good piece. I really like how you wrote it. Keep up your great work! I wihs you the best of luck in the contest.
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thank you
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