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Whitewinged Prancer

Her moonlight eyes reflect gossamer fog
This angelic creature with an aura of light
She's Whispering soflty in unique dialogue
Forcing the Witnesses out of the night

Of flesh and of bone, the Witnesses rise
Toutured souls of the Devil's deep depths
Of sulfur and evil they wear flesh as a guise
Leaving nothing behind, except havoc and death

They cannot hide now; for she is arisen
The innocent souls will be free from their prison
The ones who were plagued by the souls of the damned
Are released from their cages under her mighty command

The Creature of Light; Our Savior is she
As the Heavens rejoice in gay jubilee
Her grace is divine; Her body a dancer's
Praise be the one called the Whitewinged Prancer!

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  • Lowell Poe
    October 21, 2009

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    ...They cannot hide now; for she is arisen
    The innocent souls will be free from their prison
    The ones who were plagued by the souls of the damned
    Are released from their cages under her mighty command

    Very cool lass....
    I really am glad you commented on my work......
    just to give me the chance to read this.
    Excellent lass...

    Bless ya
    little gypsy,
    Liam


  • spideracer gold member
    October 21, 2009

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    I gather you love horses, well it comes out in this poem at least. Just one question, any reason why you use capital letters with ''Whispering, Witnesses'', ''Devil's'', ''Creature, ''Light'', ''Our Savior'' and ''Heavens''? Anyway you did well here, indeed a well written poem. Thanks for sharing it.


    • kamikage
      October 22, 2009
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      I capitalized them because they are names of people and emphasis, mostly. Whispering is a fluke, but the Witnesses are defined a group of souls forced to rise, according to Revelations; emphasis on the Devil; Creature of Light, because it is another name (in my imagination) as the Whitewinged Prancer (who is supposed to be an archangel); emphasis on Savior and Heavens.
      Thank you for your comment


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 15, 2009

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    This was really good and very enjoyable to read. It was well written. I enjoyed it. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • MelissaluvzSheila gold member
    October 5, 2009

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    Nicely done.... Very well written.... I enjoyed reading this.
    Anyways.. This was good. Keep up the awsome work!!

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