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trust only trapped butterflies



even with torrential rain
daisies refused to flourish
they wept, heads bowed
petals filled with pain
for the tenderness and love
left crunched beneath boots
as you walked away

you cared not about
cascading waterfalls
that crept softly from beneath lids
nor deception that began
as butterflies trapped
in my stomach’s pit
escaping as sobs between
gasping breaths of reality

you went about life
planting gardens with her
fertilizing new growth
upon infertile land
your warmth
evident in each springs new bloom
until the butterflies
found a new home in her

I heard the gate swing
in that familiar way on your return
heard you stop dead in your tracks
for there was no garden to tend
here anymore
just a slab of grey concrete
making the biggest statement of all

our love doesn’t grow here
anymore

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt ~ why did you come back after I already moved on?

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  • Desire gold member
    October 14

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    Oh My~

    Wow~
    This swells the eyes and sheds tears...
    Powerful piece Beautiful and sorry I didn't see this earlier
    ...Oy~~~~
    The images just tug at the Heartstrings
    Holy Smokes~ Teach me please...
    You brought Heat also a Message that reaches to the core
    Keep that quill dancing Precious
    Thank You for sharing Your Voice
    Best wishes in all You do Sweet One~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Mango Memories
    October 4
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    Perfect. Perfect!!!


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 4

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    You have captured the torrent of passion,
    reflected the posture of the crushed daisy,
    and beautifully, starkly presented the cold
    gray that now resides, unwelcomingly.
    And yet, the return,

    Stunningly brilliant, relatable!

    M-C


  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 3

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    Oh my, mother of effing pearl
    was this exceptional!!! Every
    word clung to me like honey,
    and brought me to a piece of
    past where it stung. You have
    drawn in the audience so strongly
    here i am sure all can find a part
    of themselves within as I have.

    So emotional, so eloquent,
    so softly depicted..

    This is my new fave!




    xxx


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    October 3

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    Brilliant take on the prompt
    This poignant piece blows the
    prompt out of the water...
    Kinda makes me wonder,
    why do they want to come after the other one has moved on
    However it happens all the time
    It's like they only want to cause more pains and heartaches
    at least, that is the way that I see it

    Wish you the best in the contest
    Keep your talented quill dancing
    Much love Sis

    David


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 3

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    Wow.. I'm loving this one, because I can absolutely relate to it! I've had someone come back, but I'd done my grieving and love wasn't growing there any more.

    Stunning write filled with poignant and fitting imagery!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 2

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    Wonderfully penned
    as usual
    thank you for this read
    good luck

    Love,
    Passions

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