Simplicity never tasted so sweetly
as do your lips, nectar of the gods
Twisted emtions filled with undying hope
I shall always hold you close to my heart
loves gentle touch swept over quickly
as I was captured by your words
filled with euphoric sensations
I was enchanted by all that you are
I have been moved, swayed
and even brought to tears
as I read your soul, my open book
one thing still remains, the love...
I still hold deeply for you
Author notes
Congrats sweetie hope you are having a wonderful day and that all is well on the east coast! Much love Aaron.. I did this on my iPhone and will correct alighnment and punctuation at another time...
A contest entry
- SHOW ME YOUR OWN STYLE by girl-interrupted by Girl-Interrupted.
838 points, ended October 19, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Do I see a typo here? Now that ain't like you Aaron, you must have had a late night when you wrote this. Word is ''emtions'' = ''emotions''. In your author notes you say that you will come back to this poem another time and make corrections, so I'm assuming you know about your one typo. Anyway lets pretend I didn't see that, for here again you show your raw talent. Yes powerful with deep emotions and the words just flow beautifully, a great job you've done writing this poem.
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Simply WONDERFUL !!!!
Your words are like a heady wine that just slides smoothly and efortlessly,and leaves one feeling contented and fulfilled
Many warm fuzzies to you, keep the ink flowing
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the emotion in this piece is so deep... it seems to pour from your soul as well as your fingertips...
thanks so much for entering Aaron and best of luck in the contest!
love,
becca
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Thank you Becca. My wishes and best regards to you as you judge this tough contest.
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Aaron, in just a handful of words, you manage to scribe something of exquisite, breathtaking beauty.
It's been a long time since I've read your words. Way too long x.x
but I'm glad to see you back on
best of luck in the contest.
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you know.. i just checked the other day to make sure you were still on my favs since i haven't read anything by you. this was beautiful, aaron. glad to see a post from you... and a good one at that
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Indeed it has been a long time, I hope that all is going well with you?
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I love this poem, its very heartfelt. seems like you can do just about naything on an i phone... Im really glad to see you writing again!! Even when your rusty you still write an amazing poem!
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Thanks, still haven't found my muse though
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Where there is a will
there is technology!
And your will speaks
in beautiful emotion
that shines from the page!
M-C
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excellent Aaron
beautiful,deep..... and from the heart?............brilliant write from a brilliant author......on the topic of technology,do I go betamax or VHS?
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Thank you sir for the wonderful compliments lol which would you prefer the VHS or the other one
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Luvly poem. Seems ages since I've read anything from you. Kudos for writing it on the iphone. I got a new phone yesterday took me a day to figure out how to download a new wallpaper
technology hates me.
Good luck in the contest.
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Aww it has been forever but I'm truly happy you stopped by to say hello!
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