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Mendacity

Missing image
pragmatic pulses of puke
spewed forth from mouth
stitched in lies

painted on vacant face,
pathetic plebian promises
flowed to ears plugged
from previous deceptions

your mouth visibly moved
with practiced attempts
to justify actions,
while the door closed

and I walked away

Author notes

Pic #4: The rain by ~OjosVerde

just thoughts....

Mendacity: lies, deception, deceit, dishonesty.......

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  • Judith Chandler
    November 13
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    Not your usual style but fun to read.


  • Hikari Lady
    October 17

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    I loved the way you wrote this and the metaphor, the imagery, the words and emotions they all made thei piece perfect. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    Love
    ~Noor


    • aboomer silver member
      October 28
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      thank you so much Hikari Lady for the lovely comment. Glad you enjoyed this.


  • Swan song gold member
    October 10

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    I have to admit i love the way you worded this poem. It just felt good to read!!!!
    I think Bravo!!!!!


    • aboomer silver member
      October 10
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      thank you so much for reading and commenting Swan song - glad you enjoyed this.
      best wishes


  • islekine gold member
    October 7

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    Whoa!

    Well worth the wait to read something new from you!
    The opening stanza is killer!! The whole thing rocks...but the opener...really draws one in! and you keep it going...until you close the door!
    Best wishes in the contest and always!
    Thanks for sharing your talent!

    and


    • aboomer silver member
      October 7
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      Thank you so much islekine for such a wonderful comment. Glad you enjoyed this.


  • PastelMoons gold member
    October 3

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    'your mouth visibly moved
    with practiced attempts
    to justify actions,'

    This spoke to me..
    I can relate ... more than
    I care to admit...
    And your last line.. made me want
    to shout Whooohooo and stand for an ovation!!!
    Outstanding!!!
    Thanks for sharing
    and best wishes in the contest!

    ~Pastel

    • aboomer silver member
      October 7
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      thank you so much for commenting and your lovely reply Pastel - glad you enjoyed this.
      Sorry that you can relate - I think way too many people can, sadly....


  • Denerica
    October 3

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    Wonderful flow of words to depict those things that hinder against a true heart. Yet we stay plugged in. Excellent. Blessings.


    • aboomer silver member
      October 7
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      Thank you so much Denerica for your lovely comment. I am glad you enjoyed this.
      blessings

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