picked her brain to find
something that resembled thought
not chaos but calm
but nonsense running rampant
tied her tongue inside her mouth
silent screams bellowed
banging against fractured skull
no one but she heard
the clanging from within
deft demons were partying
aware of her haunt
yellow teeth glistened with grins
saliva dripping
as they rubbed their hands with glee
sending her running for air
unable to breathe
seething with want of relief
wanting to see light
darkness pummeled her tossed world
she died knowing nothing good
a child running wild
in the stalks of dense cornfield
a scarecrow scares her
Author notes
The first four stanzas are written in the traditional Senryu Form which is 5-7-5-7-7 syllables. Ending with a traditional haiku, which is 5-7-5 syllables. I tired to follow the prompt plot by using these forms.
Hope this is what you were seeking as a submission.
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Be blunt! Be honest! I'm a big girl, I can take it. THANKS!
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You are able to breath in the steps of poetry
No doupt you are also able to to see the light instead of "darkness pummeled..." at the other hand to know nearly all good things before "the stalks of dense..." things scare the readers of yours!
Many thanks poet friend!
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Great Form...
The ugly guy on the left almost made me run for cover before reading. lol! Some pretty spooky stuff here written in wonderful forms. I love form poetry it gives you that extra challenge to stay within the parameters of the form but yet still use your words to get get you point across. You did awesome with that for someone who really doesn't like gore! lol
lilangel'snemesis
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Wow~
You go on Grammy
What a Gem You create and in form
Oy!!!!
I try Haiku and sneeze rattling my noggin
so I stopped
Love how You presented this and the images
that send shivers up and down spine~
Bravo!!! You Excellent
The border kicks tail too
Adore these lines~
yellow teeth glistened with grins
saliva dripping
as they rubbed their hands with glee
Time for me to stalk You now
Keep that quill dancing
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes in all You do
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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This was really good. It was very nicely written. The background goes great! Thanks so much for entering and good luck to you in the contest.
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Wow... I gotta type somethign 'unique' now? Hmmm... How should I start? I mean, what can I say that hasnt' been said before? Now here's your
Lubs you. One day we'll have tea and crumpets...
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One day for sure and it doesn't take reading one of my insane poems to make you create something "unique". LOL Lubs you 2!
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