Slowly I am falling
Into an empty hole
Where I find my heart
Is black as coal
No comfort
No rest
I see my life
Is a total mess
Beaten & broken
Left for the crows
Cowering in fear
Of all my foes
Simply wonderful
This pain feels good
My soul tainted
I’m not understood
Blood on my lips
Dirt on my knees
I wont be controlled
I wont ask please
On my feet I stand
Hits from left and right
I’ll take all the blows
And still win the fight
Broken family
Foggy past
Hidden pain
Behind the mask
I will never fall
Cant bring me down
An evil grin
Will replace my frown
Make me angry
I dare you too
Cut me through
I’ll do the same to you
I am mighty
I am strong
I am lonely
I am wrong
I may be broken
And misunderstood
I don’t care
Cause life is good
Author notes
I decided to write this on my birthday 
Happy B-day to the dark poet Oka
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I truly enjoyed this poem!
The rhyme was brilliant and i love your choice of words. I thought this line was fabtastic : 'Beaten & broken
Left for the crows
Cowering in fear
Of all my foes'
Your defently a thinker!
Lana
p.s Happy Birthday!
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I like how you came full circle. You shared the bad and then you came to sharing the good, and the inner strength that you have within you...My first read of yours and I liked it!
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A dark one with a happy overtone, nicely done and Happy Belated Birthday.
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awww!! sissyness!
i missed your b-day!!
happy belated birthday sissy pie!!
lovely dark poem, i love it. its sad tho
i wont let you be lonely or broken
love you loads
-Vampyness
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you know you can always talk to me and im tryingmy hardest to figure out how i can get you out of there so you dont have to put up with it anymore you can talk to me whenever you need to if possible im always here for you kc and im sorry your bday wasnt as good as it should be...i have a wonderful gift idea so i hope you like it
love you-suicidalonion
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