As if it had
always existed,
my love for him
is a world
I was born into -
the moment
we met,
my first
deep breaths.
A contest entry
- craving by Emmyb.
400 points, ended October 4, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Is it possible that our love lives before us? Do we find again a soul we loved before? Perhaps this first breath is only one of many first breaths . . . or so it sometimes seems.
Beautifully written . . . so very true.
Garrison
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Like oxygen only said better.
Enjoyed the read.
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Blessings for writing such a moving poem, Tara.
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Oh yes... I know this moment, the breathlessness of it all. So very well penned with few words. It never takes more than a sigh to describe true love. Eloquently written from a loving heart! Just beautiful!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Hi Renee, thanks for your visit to my page and for this lovely comment.
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This is beautiful in its simplicity and yet quite deep in feeling and meaning. I liked this. It could be the beginning of something even longer, but I do like it just the way it is..
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How beautiful, love is such a wonderous gift
You write with such heart and passion.
Smile brightly
Tony
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stunning....
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one of the most amazing love poems I believe I've ever read.
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Wow! The understatement and underlying effect of this poem really stab the readers like me. I'll say that this is the air, the breath of love. The impression of this is flattering to any lovers that'll read the poem. If a person will write something like this to someone, they're both lucky to nest with each other.
short and brilliant tara.
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awwww !
this is beautiful
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I am not sure if you wrote this to a word confinement or not but you have employed just 25 words which do, indeed, oxygenate and the desire, the depth, the contentment and need are delicious.
Kudos. -
awwww
It short but sweet....i love it -
Stunningly beautiful in it's simplicity ... much like love.
Sue
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Oh, yes, gal! I love this!
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simple but at the same time lovely
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Perfect title and theme correlation
Incredibly poignant
Great write!
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how beautiful this is. this poem doesn't need anything more...it's perfect as it is. made me think of something Rumi said (I think it was Rumi): "lover's don't finally meet - they are in each other always".
~ Nicolette
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Vivid Link
I love the pre-destined world you make of love, and the visceral feel of falling in love with that of birthing: coming into the light, the awakening deep inrush of air, the cry of arrival and the joy of everyone surrounding at the birth. Great link.
Jack
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what a beautiful comment, thank you...
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Love nurtures ...
the fetal need, the urge to be borne.
Love
Myra
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oooh i like this. who wouldn't want to feel that - love as rebirth, renewal - the world, one's existence forever altered - made new.
there is a purity in this piece. no words wasted. lovely. - Mary Jo
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perfect
reading this did good things to my heart (:
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each line in this piece holds so much ... flows with the unspoken.
good luck in the contest.
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what a connection this must be tara. i can tell this was written from the heart. and its so nice - so loving.
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I deeply appreciate your ability to distill an overpowering emotinal connection, into an exquisite poetic reality. This seems flawless to me, in its delicate tremble of inner truth. Beautiful is inadequate for this. Once again, a timeless piece.....
Thank you Tara....
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Love it Tara! Thanks for another amazing write!
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Wow what a perfect metaphor.
~~~As if
it had always
existed before us,
my love for him
is a world
I was born into -
the moment
we met,
my first
deep breaths.~~
I had to quote the entire perfect poem, to express my favorite part.
You are a breath of Air.
Joe
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now that is as close to perfection as it gets... LOVE this. but what don't i like that you write... really. gosh.
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you give me shivers good shivers...
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Ten lines of perfection.
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Beautifully portrayed. I believe that when you meet someone, a whole new world is born; a new person to an extent - one half of a whole Big sigh.
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Romance...
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breathtakingly
sweet thoughts..wow, nice one my friend..
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Lovely, as always.
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your words are something to inhale to...so beautiful
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a very......
pleasing ,metaphor.
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yeah, that does seem to be how it feels, eh? very well put.
as natural as breathing ...
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love at first breath, that is a new one i have not heard of before but it was good, i like this short and loving poem, keep it flowing
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Stunning. The simplicity of love is often ignored and sometimes it really is just as simple as this. Your creativity and brevity always astounds me. Best to you in the contest
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beautiful, guess this must be what true love feels like... good luck in the contest
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Tara I have read of few of your writes
and I always seem to come up with
the same answer beautiful!
with love and blessings
Rend
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Beautifully expressed.
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Lovely thoughtful sentiments, shows there are many dimensions to us, and somehow they all come together in moments like this...PK
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Very simple piece with a deep and striking appeal and meaning.
I'm not sure if you need luck in this contest, this is a winner.
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Good luck to the other entrants... this rocks
Simple comment for a simple poem. Simply beautiful.
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breathtaking
yes, we are born into the simple world of our own love - which is everywhere. i love your thought process...something new every time.
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deep breaths. o lord. perfect.
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um this is a comment from me and Glenn Wood, but wow. we are sitting here together and we just read this. wow!!! you never fail to amaze us with your words!
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that is so cool..thanks so much you guys! you must be from Victoria too then Katelyn..?
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hahah close, we live in Nanaimo!
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ah...right.
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short and creative.
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soft and soothing.
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I know that feeling! This is beautiful with so few words! Amazing write!
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Fantastic.
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awww this sounds so sweet .... i think you did so much better than me ...mine is silly now that i read yours...good luck in emmybs contest too..
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