Aloud I wail............
You wrap your cloaked emotion taut?
despite my pleading lovers stance
which as disguised fidelity
awaits to guard your fragile soul .
Aloud I wail and ponder
it's worth all pain and scorn
oh slip away and wonder
as darkness welcomes me
take advantage while you may
for time is never free,
pay you must, name your fee
for this is all you get.
A contest entry
- The Closest thing to God by DancingStar.
950 points, ended October 10, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
any feed back is always helpful
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I feel you here. Love at any cost, is the pleasure worth the pain? The time spent working/waiting on relationships is something to consider as well. Very well written and thought provoking.
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Very good poem.
I love the imagery.
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Friend...I feel your pain in this write..The pain of rejection speaks loudly through these lines...well penned!
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Mmmm!
A very interesting and well written poem, I like it a lot. People shouldn't be taking advantage, nobody puts up with it forever...as you rightly say.
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Thank you
Thank you for your comments, I definately owe you a read in return.
TC
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Wow, just as the prompt suggests, in the love commandment, you get close enough to let your heart be soft, open, receptive, but getting close to God it has to be guarded from turning to stone. Well done. Blessings.
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Thannk you
Thank you so much for reading this and for your comments.
I am grateful.
TC
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