moist leaves
stuck to my shoes
pieces of Fall
A contest entry
- Spring into Autumn haiku by Peteskid.
1400 points, ended October 6, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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1400 points. That's a lot of points per syllable.
As you've noticed, it seems Autumn is always wet in some way. It has a very distinctive smell too. Well, out in the countryside it does anyway.
I kind of like the "pieces" word to describe an aspect of Autumn. It sort of makes each leave have more significance.
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quite connective
ah this isn't as bed hair from out in weather but as bow when by the toe, scuffed extra sweet newly so to speak.
wow miniaturely you maturely proved skillful
the first line imprints clearly, but leaves one up in the air per se lol, and so next verse has suddenness of a zoom's accomodation not just explicitly explaining
then third is nice touch of rarity still with resonance how it will fill yards and may not be measured as much --
fine funnies,
carolyn
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Beautiful haiku, the everyday experience captured in a deeper meaning, things that tell us a season is here, that recall past seasons too- sights, sounds, and the feelings they provide; this is excellent. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging; welcome to the finals...PK
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