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fourth Hokku




under haloed clouds
even the pond in the woods
is changing colors








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fourth Hokku

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  • Ava Noire silver member
    October 13
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    Simply beautiful. I love the use of the word "haloed." That word alone just needs to be said aloud.
    I would however, eliminate the word "even." I read it first without "even" and realized my mistake but when I went back to reread it, it lost its initial effect. Overall quite good.