Sand trickles slowly down, from open palms;
stretched forth, from a broken spirit.
Only shattered remnants of what,
I think, I once called myself, remain.
winter holds sway upon this heart,
void of love, that it yearns for.
Committed to self sacrificing choices.
Cased within eternity, solitude is my companion.
Author notes
Just something to get off my mind... I haven't written in a few months...ok a lot of months and wanted to dust of my brain and fingers a bit and see how things started flowing or if they even do anymore.
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Sometimes solitude can be the best companion - at least there is no one to break you down. The voice in this piece is sad, showcasing almost a quiet desperation. Beautiful. The only recommendation I could offer you to better it is to slightly revise the font - I can appreciate the purpose of making it small, perhaps to show how small you feel at times? But it wreaks havoc on the eyes of your older readers! And I wouldn't want to miss a word!
Keep your chin up & the ink will flow. Happy belated birthday.
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Thank you for the birthday wishes and for the advice I will change that. You def. caught the idea of the text being as small as it is for a reason to show and make the reader feel as I did. I hope you're doing well! I'm doing quite well actually and leaving for PA on Monday morning!!! Take care
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Haunting and kinda sad but so very beautiful
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your words so vividly express your soul
love seems to govern, I wonder sometimes perhaps if we love ourselves more we would not depend on others love to complete ourselves,
we tend to be hard on self and we shouldn't
beautiful my friend...
very beautiful and sincere
God bless you...
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Brilliant.!!
I agree with all the previous comments.
The pain can be felt, very well written.
A pretty damn good comeback if you ask me !!!!
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Soul Searching Excellence
introspection comes easy to the talented,dusty fingers or not
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It's great to see you back here and writing again.
I feel your pain in this write and hope that things turn
around for you very soon! Take care!
Jeremy0826 -
i can feel your ache, and know this well
I believe there is one for you, dont ever
give up hope,
Love & blessings
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Wow, the last line leaves me with a slightly haunted feeling.
Very deep write; the emotions are strong and the subject really makes me ponder a few things in my own life.
Brilliant job with this write, it's great to see you back in action!
♥ kate
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