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[ my life ]

my life

my world

my total chaos

its all around me

taking me

holding me

i hate this

i want more then this

i want to belong

i want someone

never happens

just a dream

i need to wake up

can't

or

is

it

won't

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  • WeeIrishLady
    December 31, 2009
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    I think this is nicely written.

    Grammatical error: In the eight line, 'then' should be 'than'.

    Best wishes,

    .x.Caoilfhionn.x.


  • Mad4life
    December 23, 2009

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    Sweet

    I so love this poem. Really creativly writen and the red for the background I love it. I feel the same way most of the time...but way to go on admiting it. Something I am still struggling with at age 20.


  • i inhale purple gold member
    October 18, 2009

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    just the question, at least you're aware of it.. we got so bought into it that we are almost unconsciously telling ourselves we cant..


  • darkcuttinglove
    October 3, 2009
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    perfectly smooth flow

  • dstandridge
    October 2, 2009
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    dats wat it do

    i like that but it is kinda short

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