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Babe, Chew On That A Minute - Or Two

Babe,
If you still
Want to Worship me
The Female Form(less)
I’ll let you
Now.

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Something tells me this one will get some reads. ; ) ; ) ; ) ; )

Hey - comments would be nice too! 5 total views, and not one word.....seems inconceivable NOTHING was stirred.....

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  • The Drifter
    October 26

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    I pull back from the word "worship" which means someone has lost their perspective and are blinded or having a very limited view. One who cannot see all the beautiy but is centralized, too focused on an object or a person.
    I wish to see the person for all that is them, meaning their faults as well as their strengths. This is them in totality, the whole that one should have regard for, the whole that makes them what they are, meaning the whole that makes them special, unique, wonderful and special.
    This is a well written poem that makes one think. Thank you for sharing.


    • Stirrer of Stardust
      October 26
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      I agree. And when you can see them as they are - faults/flaws and All.....that Is where You find Worship, I think. Finding, nurturing, inflaming the spark of another so that you both burn brighter........

      Thanks again for all the lovely comments.

      ya All~Ways, ~ Jan ~


  • awannabepoet
    October 21

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    I see that which you would have me see, for my eyes are your eyes, my ears are your ears and my mind ...well that is a different thing all together..LOL


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    October 9

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    Sometimes we seem to lose ourselves; view ourselves as a waste of a woman or a woman lacking. I find in those times, no matter what the cirumstanaces (physical or mental) we only need to find our own self worth to shine brilliantly once again. This piece speaks to me of that, of the doubts and/or denial of what we deem we may be unworthy of or ready for. To me this is a rebirth of womanhood on the physical, mental and spirtitual plane. Excellent


  • Rainbow7
    October 6
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    How interesting!


  • Tmiller248
    October 6

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    Interesting write. The use of form(less) implies being worshiped for something other than your female form. The partner who loves us for who we are ,not what we look like???


  • PoetessA.L.OPrunty
    October 4

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    Something to ponder on...

    The reader could take these lines in various directions, which is unique in itself. The (less), adds mystery...a sense of loss...Impressive indeed!

    A. L. O'Prunty

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