Flood waters come,no fake,
Leaving havoc in their wake
Raging waters just to take,
Things we will have to build and remake
Looking all around at the lake.
Flood waters go, now we remake
Flood waters come with zest,
It puts everyone to a trial and test,
It took our comfortable nest,
Leaving us, no time to rest
Memories are held close to our chest,
Flood waters go, singles out the best
Flood waters come it seems from hell,
End results with,rebuild I yell
If I scream at times it's to tell,
Ideas,plans,action, you hear the bell
Flood waters go, all ends well
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a nice rhyme pattern each stanza in mono rhyme, the short lines give it a rhythm, make it quite easy to read as well as to understand...this is quite good, good subject too...PK
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Great job at describing a flood. Where I grew up we had floods every year but I've never seen anyone lose their homes. Us kids got to stay home from school because we couldn't get across the flooded road. Wonderful rhyme and flow as alway, sis. Best of luck in the contest.
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Tears at the heart,
this piece that cries out
so dramatically.
The repeated rhyme
enforces the urgency,
does not let the mind
forget the experience.
Rings true, right from
the heart, Susan!
M-C
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i really enjoyed the flawless rhyme in this piece!
great job
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i did hear about that recent storm....flood water indeed...
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Well done!
You've described the aftermath of a flood very well (as though you've experienced a few yourself). GOOD LUCK in the contest, Sis! Really good quickie!
Love & hugs,
♥ Maureen
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awesome write, very well penned
best of luck in the contest
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