Blade
So sharp
Breaking skin
Watching the blood
Run slowly down soft
Pale white skin you always blacken.
Endlessly abusing me
With those violent acts of your rage.
Pride, my face, forever scarred by you.
Tracing the lines of your latest marking.
Author notes
This is just a practice poem for the Etheree Experiments class. ^.^
No, I'm not abused. Just inspiration~
A contest entry
- Strangers Welcome! by Almighty Aphrodite.
500 points, ends November 29, 17 entries
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But your writte screams of experience with this terrible thing, whether or not you actually dealt with it firsthand.
I used to run the "Etheree Experiments" class actually, and as the original teacher, I am glad to see that whoever is running the assignments now is actually teaching people. I am glad you found inspirtation, even if it was with such a sad subject. The images here scare me, but I too have written about abuse and can unfortunately relate. The flow is excellent, and the count is perfect! Thank you for entering this contest, and best of luck to you.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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You may not be abused but you describe it like someone who has been through it. You did a great job with this write. Keep up the great writing hun! Good luck in all you do!
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thank you!
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I loved this one. For a practice poem and for something you've never actually experienced I think you did a great job! This poem is amazing
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thank youuu!!
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mayb thts it.. and im seriously lik in love w/ this poem =]]]
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i really like it!!! is this newhere else cuz i feel lik ive read sumthing lik it b4.... but thts not a bad thing dnt wry.. keep writing!
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thank you! ^.^
hmm I haven't had a chance to post this anywhere else yet... maybe since the topic is written about so much there's many similar poems?
thanks so much for your comment!!!!
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