Granny I remember the times long ago.
When you were still here loving us so...
I remember the pies , the cookies, and cakes,
Oh granny how you could bake...
I remember our talks on those warm summer days.
I really did listen to every word you would say.
I pass them on to my kids everyday,
making sure they know, this is what my granny would say...
Granny I remember the days long ago,
When you was still here loving us so...
Sitting on the front porch, rocking away.
Listening to the rain on the other hill coming our way...
Your beautiful rose bushes in the middle of the lawn.
Up on the hill a mother deer and her fawn...
Oh how you loved your little bird bath and your lilacs too.
Granny do you know how much we miss you...
Granny I remember the times long ago,
when you was still here loving us so...
I remember the kiss you gave grandpa every night.
Saying heres hoping, every things alright...
Granny I remember that Nov. day,
When grandpa called and said you went away...
How I wish you was still here.
Wiping my tears and calming my fears.
Granny you been gone now 21 yrs...
I remember the days of long ago,
when you was still here loving us so...
Granny I look to the sky and call your name.
I still remember playing all those games...
Your memory will always live on in me.
now that, I am a Granny too,
Just like you is how I want to be....
Granny I will always love and miss you...
Author notes
this is for my grandma, my best friend... I love you granny and still miss you ,even after 21 yrs...
Written April 8th, 2004
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correct, you have to say "when you were". You also seem to sometimes forget to capitalize "i", as you did in the last line. Errors in a poem are not good anytime, but the last line is definitely not the place to have them. It has to carry the poem and an obvious error there really messes that up. There's no way you can say "you was" in English, not even pidgen English.
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this is a such a loving poem. man, my grandmothers are still alive, but i never had a really close family. the whole family is messed up. i envy you, your grandmother sounded like she was an angel from above. i can feel just how much you two had for each other in this poem. great write. thanks for entering.
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I still like this one babe. I wanna enter but i don't know which one to enter. HELP ME BABY!!!!!!!!! I love you good luck
all my love eternally..........TAZZ
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