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Girl in the mirror

Theres this girl I see, I dont know who she is
she looks back with a smile on her face
but I can tell just by looking at her
shes sad and her minds in another place.
She tries to stay strong in front or people
though in her heart shes alone and cold
even though she smiles and laughs I know
theres another story waiting to be told.
Shes afraid to trust people so shes silenced
only able to open up to the demon inside
the one that causes her so much misery
making her feel so worthless she wants to die
She doesnt realise how much people care
and want to help her over the tough times
but when anyone asks how shes doing
she automatically lies and says shes fine.
She doesnt need to hide within herself
theres so many people around that care
and they would never forgive themselves
if one day they woke up, and she wasnt there.
I look at her again carefully and smile sadly
and she smiles back at me sadly too.
We both want to get better and be healthy
but the thing is its just too hard to do.
I can see the desperation behind her eyes
and I can see her longing to be free
and as I begin to walk away I realise
I know who she is, its always been me.

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starving4perfection

A contest entry

i dont know where it came from but its kinda how i feel right now..:(

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Comments

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  • LeilaJayne
    November 14
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    I've felt like this alot, i still get my days where i do now, but life has its good parts too This was very dark!
    Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest... x


  • savemysoul
    November 8
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    i loved and related to this. good job and thanks for entering.

    -- jordan.


  • robena
    October 17

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    well, this piece made me see my self very clear like.
    well penned. sad but right on point. way to show your feelings and emotions


  • Enrinye
    October 14

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    wow, this is honestly a great write...full of beautiful imagery and lines...you expressed your emotions perfectly, it is a strong heartfelt poem...

    "Shes afraid to trust people so shes silenced
    only able to open up to the demon inside
    the one that causes her so much misery
    making her feel so worthless she wants to die
    She doesnt realise how much people care
    and want to help her over the tough times
    but when anyone asks how shes doing
    she automatically lies and says shes fine."

    I could absolutely relate to these lines, it was like reading about myself...I absolutely adored it, it was a pleasure to read it, first I didnt like that it is all in one paragraph but it worked out well and it is perfectly flowing...

    the last line was really amazing, it was like a cherry on top

    take care and congrats to the gold
    Suza


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 10

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    This was very good write. I enjoyed reading this. I am sure that people can relate to this one way or another. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • XXCrimsonRaineXX
    October 8

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    i really liked this. i can relate to it in so many ways. this was beautifully written. i look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

    ♥
    XXCrimsonRaineXX
    (sam)


  • VampireKitty-
    October 6

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    this was a great poem it was awesome and i loved it great emotion great flow wonderful idea...great job...btw i love the background...good luck in the contest


  • XxPrinc3ssMaraxX
    October 6

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    This one almost brought me to tears. I have a poem i've written recently called 'Reflection In My Mirror' it's not the same though and it isn't exactly how I was feeling, just parts of it. I tend to write as If i'm someone else. I find it difficult to write exactly my own feelings. It amazes me that i've read two of your poems and each one is exactly how I feel or exactly the way I think or the thoughts i've had before. This is a beautiful write. Keep writing...you're amazing

    mara


  • Grey.Area.
    October 5

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    She tries to stay strong in front or people
    though in her heart shes alone and cold
    even though she smiles and laughs I know
    theres another story waiting to be told.
    Shes afraid to trust people so shes silenced

    Wow, this poem makes me......................... feel.


  • Lolitax3
    October 1

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    "Shes afraid to trust people so shes silenced
    only able to open up to the demon inside
    the one that causes her so much misery
    making her feel so worthless she wants to die"

    I love those lines. The only thing we seem to 'confide' in is the one thing that's slowly killing us. This is very easy to relate to - we want someone to reach out for us - not for us to reach out to someone (or at least that's what I feel like/interpreted this as).

    One day there will be a savior...

  • deedee 23
    October 1

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    your end is charming indeed,your first four lines is my favourite...but all of it is excellent,i loved it very much!

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