"you chose pills over Me"
chills
spills
thrills
no frills, just the shrill unlaced diabolics of drugs and pills.
phantasmagoric sight
day into night
addictions perilous fright
alights with blight, ignites, incites, invites
slavery of body
bondage of mind
chatteled to
sub-human piranhnic existence
s [ p [ e [ n [ t
c i r c l i n g c l i m b i n g d r o w n i n g
t r y i n g
t o
e s c a p e
s a t a n ' s
e l b o w
h i s
one way billet:
2
D E A T H S
........././././ {spirit & soul} /./././.........
Author notes
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Here is the word:
PLACEBO
Prompt:" You chose pills over me"
Inspiration
A contest entry
- ...Image of Inspiration X ... by Desire.
1221 points, ended October 10, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Unusual Word by GinryuStargazer.
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Comments
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wow. this is kind of gripping. it immediately pulls you in and keeps you reading and rereading. its so beautiful and the vocabulary is stunning. i am essentially in love with this poem
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love the story behind this, but this was a little bit to hard to read for me. but i can see it's worth to people that can read this better than i. thanks for entering xxx
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Thank You!
Thank You for Your entry: Psycho-tropic Hegemony
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~
I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
You took the prompt and brought forth much for the Mind to feast upon~
Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
Woven Strengths: Wow~ while reading I kept my trusted Friend-
Merriam Webster close by
This is quite the Interesting piece You have penned here~
Very Creative as well~
And Boy did I have to look up a few words
Now for~ piranhnic...I was unable to find the definition for this word~
I presumed it meant behavior of that similar to a piranha
The images I was getting after reading~
felt like a person alive...but not living if that makes any sense
Like walking dead~ just going through the motions...
Not on a high...but low~ unable to be coherent~or understand what
is happening around him or her Death circles...
I am shown as if a parasite is eating from the inside out...
Some people can recognize the signs except for the victim~
Kept getting images of flesh falling off body...inner-outer Beauty
tainted~
Also~ last line...
{spirt & soul}
Looks like spirt...is missing an i...spirit....
Wanted to bring that up for review
I'm shown with each pill...a part of Self dies..
However that is to be Interpreted.
You give the Reader much to think about
Love the direction You took with this prompt
Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense
Powerful verse and message You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
slavery of body
bondage of mind
Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Many blessings too 
with much love and light~ Desire~*~
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Oh God, this made me ansy... rose my anxiety to a high level.... I'm not addicted to anything, but I do enjoy how benzodiazepines numb you... Til you're gone, I love it.... It depicts addiction perfectly.
"no frills, just the shrill unlaced diabolics of drugs and pills."
'Laced' and tugging and tugging until they choke....
" day into night
addictions perilous fright"
Loosing light... the people you love.... your reason ....Its very scary, I bet
"slavery of body
bondage of mind"
Imagine loosing will because you've sold it? As a person, I understand, as a sufferer of mental illness, I get it..... Totally!
I loved the format, especially the circling of words, thats how a "trip" must feel. But the price is exorbitant, too much really.... your soul and spirit.
Great portrayal, use of words, and display of format,
Kristy
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