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[All seasons haiku of faith]

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Good folks in Heaven
Sinners roasting in hot Hell
Year in and year out
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  • zilbermann silver member
    October 1
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    Most inspiring!


  • Haiku Kin
    October 1

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    I love when one can incorporate their faith into a haiku. However, like Peteskid, I have to say that this one misses the mark of what haiku are all about.

    I disagree with you, theologically speaking, but this haiku does summarize the essence of the doctrine of going straight to heaven and hell when you die. I appreciate that much.

    I hope you keep on working at haiku, though! It's a challenging form, but that's what makes it fun to learn!


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 1

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    I think you have here the idea of short, long, short haiku structure, but not really the idea of haiku which is to observe and report things perceived with our senses...unless indeed you are a most remarkable person, having seen such things i appreciate your passion and enthusiasm for your ideas. Thank you for your fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK