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moving forward



I ponder on the length of this road,
the one I've not yet taken,

but often glance at on my way back from the grocery store,
carrying two bottles of whole milk and a loaf of bread,
and I will sometimes sit on the cracked boulder
underneath the wooden stop sign
now broken;

mumbling to myself amidst the cacophony of crows overhead,
I hide in the shade of the ancient oak tree;

shielding my eyes from the afternoon sun,
I will look back at my footprints,
startling myself again when I notice only
one set;

my soul usually cries alone
when shadows cast by heavy clouds
hold me in its embrace,
and when I remember the rusty gate, the locked door,
I imagine the bedroom still empty despite your lingering presence;

then I will take one step forward,
but two steps back when cowardliness overtakes me;
I find the remnants of this heart
slowly decaying







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prompt: Decaying

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  • penman gold member
    October 24

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    Excellent

    What a terrific write. So very well expressed. Congratulations on the silver.


  • Kathraina silver member
    October 20

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    Wow, wonderful job with this write! I really like the imagery invoked in every line. A great concept and very enjoyable read!


    bravo and thank you for entering



    ♥ kate


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    October 4

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    I often ponder on the length of this road,
    the one I've not yet taken,

    Wow.. already sucked in and I haven't even read the rest! (hold on)

    This is so amazing.. Just wow, breathtaking.

    Thanks for entering and good luck.

    - Polymerized


  • Melee Vau gold member
    October 1

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    each step a poem.....

    love this sad, reflective poem of regretful reminisence. especially the last lines:
    "then I will take one step forward,
    but two steps back when cowardliness overtakes me;
    I find the remnants of this heart
    slowly decaying"


  • Aelten
    October 1

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    I just love those last two stanzas, they say so much. The whole poem is fabulous! There are so many ways to go with this kind of prompt and you have done a great job!

    A~


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 1

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    excellent~

    Very impressive sis
    Love the way you described this poem.............
    The imagery in it I could see as I read the poem
    Best of luck in the contest
    It's a winner in my book
    Been offline due to chemo..I am bouncing back LOL
    I posted a new one too drop by when ya can
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 1

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    What a wonderful take on the prompt this is!!
    Such vivid imagery that says so much, well done indeed buddy.
    All the best to you in the contest.

    Ken

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