i remember, invisible talons in my chest
i remember, my heart being ronr apart
i remember, weeping in the dark
i remember, the walls sliding into place
i remember, the loud echoing click of the lock
i remember, screaming out my rage
i remember, the berserker tearing at its cage
i rmemeber, the soft heart beat of a knock
i remember, being frozen with shcok
i remember, the walls cracking with soft chinks of light
i remember, them crumbling away with a word
i remember, being caught in her gaze
i remember, the rage being washed away
i remember, her falling into my amrs
i remember, that second embrace
A contest entry
- Quickie # 27 of 37! More Prewrites lol...Only 10 to go to reach 100!!! by Beautiful-N-Broken.
460 points, ended November 22, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what emotions does this inspire within you?
Comments
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In the second line, what is the second to last word?
In the seventh line, what does the word berserker mean?
In the eigth line, you mispelled remember.
All in all it's a great write. I love the way you ended it. Thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest. -
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I love this write. 
! Very intricately penned. I can't quite explain what this inspires but this is a very emotional write. I think that this was beautifully composed and I really love the tone and how it, in my opinion, defines the meatphors. 
! Brava on yet another great write. .
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