crescent moon --
your smile is my undoing
Author notes
N i c o l e t t e
- modern ku
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku, Senryu and Haiku Chains by liquidmindforever.
700 points, ended October 5, 26 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful and written with such elegance.
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i want a hug
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here's the
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oh, perfect!!!!!!!!
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Nothing of the sky may melt the solitary soul like the moon. Lovely expression Nic.
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so true, Stu - thanks!
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a two line haiku, my favorite style and this one has a personality...yes the smile can be the last straw, the key to the last of our resistance, so very true...wonderful haiku...PK
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your contest inspired me...thanks, PK
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do you think there's something wrong with me
i mean is it a freudian slip
the fact that i first read
"your smiley is my undoing"?
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very beautiful I guess theres an always growing poetry styles I don't know about yet..... i much rather the declining moon, fits my mood better.....
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and mine...
beautiful.
L
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Another very beautiful 'ku you've written here my friend
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this is super pretty!!!
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LOVE it!!! it's so wonderful to be able to say so much in so little!
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it is my ambition to do with words what nicolette is capable of doing in merely 7!
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~beautiful Penning
love & blessings
Rend
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lovely thru and thru
this worked in its original form with two lines. it caught my attention.
the ku captures and holds with gentle touch.
thank you poet for entering my ku contest.
wishing you the best
till then
welcome to the finalists
and stay
liquid
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thank you i changed it back
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do you think the moon has teeth?
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i hope so..
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How lovely moon!
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This is succinct. If i can give a thousand sigh to this...
excellent as always.
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ah lovely
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perfect
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It's been the undoing of many! Great work poet!
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the moon gets me every single time... and i always catch myself smiling back.
beautiful, nicolette. i don't think there is one thing i have read from you that isn't.
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I would think it is your smile that becomes the moon's undoing. 
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Nicolette moon---
your smile disarms me
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Wish I could do that!
Wonderful...
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okay, this reads very sensual to me, is it just me? lolol....beautiful Nic!
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mmmmm so pretty, so peaceful
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web cam smiles and web moons... yes
all worth the waiting in time zones for
and such a delicate smile to see
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Simply put, and so very lovely Nicolette.
Allyce's comment makes me laugh, but she's right, you leaves us wanting more.
lol.
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That's it?! What is this insanity? Whatever this ku is, I don't like it
Of course I like this though Alone, it is powerful and would have been a grand opening to a poem! I think crescent moons and smiles go so very well together: the shape; the luminosity. "Undoing" is such a fabulous word too and I love how you have applied it here! In the light of a such a being all the doors fly open; all the coils spring; all solidarity unravels. See where your mind takes me with so few words!
Brilliant poetry Angel Gogo! 
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love it
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