Mood: Angry Aggressive
Pl: Room
I can be without having to be
Return sound and unharmed
I've left countless times unnumbered
Come to when required sufficiently
I can be while being dead unburied
Exist within my body, pulse my veins
Run the risk of breathing more
And die before eyes seeming alive
Who conquers such quest like curse?
Who depicts mortality in flesh?
It is I, the personification of death
Walking tall among the taller heads
I feel the need to brag, in my skin rags
Since few know this low high
This rising imperfection I've perfected
Mere content in a bent soul unfolding
I can be yet lack life reasonably real
Be scarce of sources detailed
Unarchived and having sense
But be above the ashes of my cremation
I speak foolery sane so polished
It requires trepidation and insanity
One can be split unwhole and apart
This valiance is the try of tries
I speak the language of the neurotic
Bring forth the connection of this dissociation,
Talk the talk of dysphoria's diction
But I'm not feigning a lazy crazy approach
I've been too long in this world of woe
But pain is a friend reminding me
Shaping me into a finer person
Keeping far the stars of my scars
They are a galaxy on their own
Exploding in the distance of my unconscious
Burning the corners of my mind
Extinguishing all oxygen to hope
I can see me now, in the distance
I've been a stranger to myself
I fiddle with riddles that starve me
But feed my need to understand me
I am vehemently able to be
I am passionately capable to live
Death knows me but doesn't own my heart
My fractures are parts of parts
This entire skeleton of reason reigns
I am perhaps a cynic, but not an idiot
I know there's one behind two
And behind one, there's zeros
Author notes
M o o n H e l i x E p i p h a n y
I often find I act more than I live. Thus, the idea. Questions welcomed as is constructive criticism.
A contest entry
- Let these clenched fists open wide, to see where all the answers lie by whiterabbit..
1200 points, ended October 1, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Say something meaningful and edificating, otherwise dont comment.
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Wonderful...
I leave the technicality for the poetics' Masters and Grammarians; and request the privilege to talk about what this composition does to my intellective system and tools. "Decimals Can Move" strikes the dynamo of my creative engines and prods waves of intuition over my soul.
Everything in the contents of "Decimals Can Move" is incorporated as a poetic grand. Its lexicon, imagery and rhythm are mingled with the essence of the scent of art in a picture where aesthetic value abounds.
I have enjoyed what I have read. "Decimals Can Move" glows.
In appreciation,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Much appreciated!!!
Wow, I feel like I have won a Pulitzer here. I'm glad you enjoyed this, the process was soul-wretching... But true. Thank you
In appreciation,
Kristy.
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incredible
i dont think i could even write something, that has such depth, so meaningfull, yet still be able to understand. You said your teacher dubbed you the "picasso" of words, this piece is the full meaning of why he said so. Your vocabulary is stunning, yet still able to be grasped, by in my opinion most people, at least most people who enjoy and read poetry. So much respect there.
I also love the loose rhyme you through in, and the alliterations were also quite powerfull, you deserved gold for that competetion, and i'm sure if you submit it to another one, you'll get the recognition this work deserves
Totally loved this piece, much love to you too
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that's sweet, thanks!
Yeah, thats me.... "The Picasso of Words," the type you have to really read and read and think and reflect..... tooo abstract for even Picasso himself lol Thank you for the comment, kind too.
And yes you can, believe me... Dont think, write... Words are as real as the world we use them in.... They are powerful, the paint, they move, the create, God the are like we are.
Much love,
Kristy
*kiss"
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I really like the vocabulary here and the abstract quality of your writing. I like all of the thoughts in here and the way that this flows.
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Thank you Steph. My best writing are always abstract. My Creative Writing teacher in high school used to call me the 'Picasso' of words... She is probably right. Im glad you both liked and understood the ending, its very out there.
Thanks for the opportunity,
Kristy
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You're welcome
You definitely have talent and your own style of writing
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You really think so? I dont know. Its too cryptic, some probably find it annoying. But I thank you
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