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on the other hand

the blinding
yellow
remembered among loud
became still

veined and thorough
yet reticent
seek to speak

intoxicated  lungs
left without breath

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  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    November 2
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    excellent...bravo
    T


  • Ryno
    October 26
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    Bravo!


  • Floorboards
    October 26

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    Incredible imagery, brother Tim, kinda scary too, i'm off for a spliff to calm mesel.


    • sheltered
      October 31
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      did, tonight actually and coughed me
      fricking lungs out

      but it was worth it!


    • sheltered
      October 31
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      damn me too
      been sick with pneumonia
      last couple weeks
      can't wait to
      fire up a phat one


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 22

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    i loved all three of your Haiku's
    just lovely!!

    Rend


  • Swan song gold member
    October 10

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    opps one haiku to a page not three entries on one page but good job here

    • sheltered
      October 15
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      hmmm,,, I thought what you meant was

      basically
      fuck Haiku
      give me what you got
      but hey
      all cool my brother.... lol

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