they raised a mangled corpse
soon to be, anyway
back flayed by the cat
and mounted like a gasping
fish--beaded eyes, and all too
bright gills
he knew us then,
our molecule and fiber
and this empty clock
that beats in our
chest
he saw strange fruit,
and poplar trees
presidential skull caps--gore in the wind
he saw piles of people that looked like
him
my god! my god! he must have said
why hast thou forsaken them?
Author notes
sometimes also titled: Eli Eli lama sabachthani, and further called: jesus was both a time traveler and a zombie, but he loved us so it's okay.
"it's a cold and a broken hallelujah" Leonard Cohen
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What did you think
Comments
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very impressive write. it says so much and is both deep and educated. well done.
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Empathetic zombie Jesus. Who knew?
Nicely done. I like the perspective and the idea of "empty clocks". It beats against our chests so hard sometimes its the only reminder that we're not dead.
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effin brilliant!!!
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i get two comments from the lunacy? You're gunna make my head big.
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Interesting
I would not commit if I thought you was joking,this piece can be taken in several ways, humor,misinformation,serious.The death of Christ is no joking matter to me or any other Christian.You crafted this well to slip between atrocious and insulting.
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very, very interesting. I enjoyed it, though I can't help but wonder about it. Thanks so much for sharing!
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wonder about it how?
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this was good! I like all of the wording and the flow of it all! Over all it was a magnificent write! I love the fact that is was a jesus poem, and it wasn't stupid... so kudos on that!
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thanks
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Jesus was not a zombie. He was a Jew.
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well, your profile is either hilarious or disgusting, I can't decide. Thumbs up if it's a joke. very funny.
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"he saw piles of people that looked like
him"
That would be a holocaust.
I'm not stupid, but apparently you can't decipher simple figurative language. I called him a zombie because he died and resurrected, something many people believe.
This poem is about how many horrible sins Christ had to forgive while on the cross, and how, when confronted with them it must have been overwhelming for him.
Thanks for trolling, though.
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wow... just.... nothing i say can begin to sum up the power of this.. ahhh mazing.
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jesus was both a time traveler and a zombie, but he loved us so it's okay.
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you have out done yourself seven. makes me envision the Son shrugging his shoulders at the horror of the futility and just goin' "awww fuck it, I'm outta here."
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my gosh what an epiphany.
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I"ve never thought of that before....time traveller and zombie...
hmmmm...interesting indeed.
there are some pretty wild theories out there....
and we are always looking for more proof in the universe
that another do-over planet does exist!
Which might explain a lot.
Have you seen the National Geographic geno study...
scientific study based on our dna that spans 60,000 years.?
Yes...
I said 60,000 years!
It's really interesting,.....you should take a peek
I'd love to hear your poetic response to it!
ears/Seattle
interesting poem!
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the comma after 'or' should be removed in your title. the way you have it isn't correct and you don't want people to have a bad first impression of your poem, especially when the poem is actually very good.
as i was reading, i knew i'd mention how much i like the middle stanza, but when i got to the ending, that just sent shivers down my spine. poignantly, powerfully written.
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Hey I would like to hear your interpritaion of it i'm fucking exauhsted and I can't make any sense of it
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A really well thought poem Wonderful (This empty clock
that beats in our chest) "Zombie", he was said to have risen from the tomb
Could be a time traveller. Great write
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Heh, I have to admit I chuckled at the title, but the poem is also rather amusing. Very nice.
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amusing how? this is a reflection on what a bunch of bastards we all are, and how when finally at the brunt of our wrath, he knew it. (though I was being a little silly with the title(s))
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That's kinda what I got from it. I think it was just the play on the old "what have you forsaken me" line from the Bible and replaced it with "why hath thou forsaken ~them~" It was surreal enough (and the title silly enough) that I found it funny. That's not to say your message wasn't potent...humor can speak truth as much as seriousness. ^_^
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This poem uses great imagery, and it flows really nicely. great job!
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