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Passion

I am numb,
I don't know what to feel.

Passion stirs within me,
yet I am afraid.

Passion has never been my friend,
it has hurt me every time.

I want to get lost in the passion,
yet I fear I will lose my soul.

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Idk....

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  • Walls-within
    September 30

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    "I am numb,
    I don't know what to feel"

    This is my favorite line. I enjoy the fact that you can portray your emotions vividly, and it helps externalize the internal questions, and mind games that others have put in the thoughts that you have. I find this a sad write, much to the effect of depression, and by your sayin in your AN "Idk...." It makes it seem like you can find no solutions to the problems at hand. I wish you the best donna, but I know I cannot possibly help you with this, it is not my job, nor my place. I want you to know that you mean so much to me, and also that I am here if you want to vent, or cry. I love you.