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Degradation

Working all the time
Still not making rent
Is this what life is?
My time can be better spent

I could be back in the Corps
Wandering across the sands
Or chlling with some buddies
Off in distant lands

However the world works
I'd rather have what I know
But if I am to be different
I know I need to grow

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  • uchideshi
    November 16
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    Such is life, Koe

    But as far as your time being "better spent", you once told me that it is what you make it. right? lol. nice write.


  • Asianflower
    October 25
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    LOL I should come live with you

    and help out with rent


  • UnionFireBug09
    October 4

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    Follow your heart and stick to your guns and things will get better with time. Everyone one hits bottom sometime

  • Deep respect; for both your ability to write something so simple yet evocative as this, and for the process you're willing yourself through. This is honest, and I like that.

    Great write.


  • Tarimornie
    October 1

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    I can see why you would feel the way you do but I believe it will get better. Just give it time. Things will become easier once you get in settled into your job. Remember I am always here for you. If there is anything you need let me know. *hugs and luv*


  • blueyez
    September 30

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    You don't wanna be there again things will get better just hang in there dear sweet koen

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