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Bought, For God....

Sister, come closer, and listen....

Through the perils of the dark lord's hand,
your soul had become ensnared,
and yet on this, the darkest eve of the year,
a single truth flashed like a flare.
In rising through your troubled mind,
to end torment within,
by speaking honestly for once,
let your healing now begin.
No more will Satan's heart control
your every dream or wish
for now with open eyes, you can
know the truth as this....

I would use all the silver
ever made or invented
if I thought that it would mean
your cancer could be prevented.
I'd approach the Lord on bended knee,
repeatedly, every single day,
with all the silver I possess
if he'd take your pain away.
Sister, I'd trade away my own treasure,
if only your sweet soul I could buy
from Satan's grasp and then I would
give it to the Lord on High.
I'd withdraw it from posessive dark thoughts,
to save you from perdition -
Come closer now, sister dear,
come closer .. and, just listen...





Author notes

PROMPT; "Do not forget, ever, that you promised me to use this silver to become an honest man. . . you no longer belong to evil, but to good. It is your soul I am buying for you. I withdraw it from dark thoughts and from the spirit of perdition, and I give it to God!" - Les Miserables.

S Y M P H O N Y

My sister said recently, "i've decided that the cancer in me is Satan. Satan IS Cancer, and that is why it brings so much death & destruction to peoples' lives." ... If I could, I would use silver to buy her soul for God, so that 'Satan' would leave her body... *rose)

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  • Insane killer Klown
    November 9
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    very good
    good luck and good writing


  • iamlost gold member
    October 22

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    I really love how you took this prompt and related it to real life and real struggles, I think that made it very strong. This quote is one that is especially important to me, and you gave it a very worthy tribute. I'm glad my contest could inspire something as touching as this.

    Thanks for your entry,
    ~lost


  • WithinYourEyes
    October 12
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    That is so beautiful. I really have nothing else to say, except that this poem addresses the sin I fight in my daily life.


    • WithinYourEyes
      October 12
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      well, let me rephrase that...i don't necessarily fight against this physically, but in an emotional, spiritual, mental sense.


  • Sheilasbabygal4life gold member
    September 30

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    This was good and very moving. I liked the way it flowed. I enjoyed reading this. It was sad and very good. i would have to say that this is my favorite part:

    if I thought that it would mean
    your cancer could be prevented.
    I'd approach the Lord on bended knee,
    repeatedly, every single day,
    with all the silver I possess
    if he'd take your pain away.

    But overall this was great!


    • Symphony
      October 1
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      sheilasbabygurl,

      thank you so much for reading and comemnting i'm glad that it flowed okay- i often wonder when I'm writing if it's too stilted to read, but looking back now, i think it's okay.

      thanks again

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