Song of summer's vibrant shout
swirls around in freedom's grasp,
surprise of dawn's performing hue
from deep within escapes a gasp.
But dance of fiery blazes lull
as subtle chill float's 'pon a breeze,
for clouds appear as heat is dulled
and autumn's hands they softly tease.
Fall's cooling winds bring soothing grace
a kiss of sighs to arid earth,
with promises of times of rest
when nature's form prepares rebirth.
In elegance her colours bright
announcing dreams in cooling sighs,
when spirit of the earth must rest
this is the call of Autumn, wise.
And so she tempers summer's heat
from gentle lace to brittle bend
as tired land becomes embraced
when autumn's temperature descends.
Author notes
A l i c e i n P o e t r y L a n d
"Autumn - the reprieve from Summer."
- Mike Garofalo, Pulling Onions
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- AUTUMN PICTURE PROMPTS AND TITLES SOO TO BE ADDED Prewrites allowed 1 day only longs rules folloeed and give credits by Treasure 5.
750 points, ended November 5, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congratulations on the bronze, this is an outstanding piece about my favourite season. You've captured the feelings perfectly with outstanding rhyme and flow.
Sue
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This is such a pretty poem...the imagery of autumn comes shining through in expressive words and rhyme and rhythm. A charming and beautiful poem.
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vivid displays with poetical phrasing, one of those hallmark seasonal greetings in the making. The first stanza is just really perfect, that's poetic phrase! nice
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I was so excited I forgot the clappies...ha!
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Fantastical!!!
Dan ordered me to come and read this as he said I would not be disappointed.
So here I am and I'm not disappointed, far from it. You write with a magical pen always but this is penned with something greater than magic and I so envy you but if I can't write like you then I am fortunate enough to be able to read you everyday.
Thankyou.....
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WONDERFUL ...
I love Autumn, it's my favourite time of year lol. And this poem just blew my away. Your rhythm and rhyme is fantastic too. Really excellent
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just wonderful
I have no idea what 2 poems beat this into a bronze place, but they must have been awe inspiring. This poem in my humble opinion is absolutely wonderful. The whole thing reeks of class, the words chosen the rhyming pattern, the flow, everything. I truly wished I could aspire to something as good as this. Truly poetic...Dan
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Thank you so much Dan for your wonderful comments They are truly appreciated.
Gaylene
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This is very pretty and this is so true after having Texas heat all summer soon as September it I am already cold. This seemed like a real peaceful poem and you painted a lovely picture. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
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a good poem that dances across forever's face, ah the colours that whisper songs across the face of mother nature, they trickle down her cheeks, and are blown with the wind, leaves of promise, life will be refreshed.
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AH!
a wonderful write involving the change from summer to fall. Could feel it, see it and stand in the coolness of the change.
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Wonderful
Such a beautiful write. It just flows through the mind. So very descriptive. Best of luck in the contest
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Yet another gorgeous read my friend. Your words paint a beautiful picture of Autumn. Though I hate cold, I welcome the brillance of fall colors, fresh crisp air and ofcourse snuggle time 
Oh wait..I'm dreaming on the latter part lol Best of luck young lady..tis wonderful! 
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