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i place my married hands
inside empty pockets,
and walk.
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Author notes
and i am torn
A contest entry
- ~ Torn ~ by Lavender Butterfly.
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ive done this for about a million reasons!!!! excellent!
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Loved this. Another amazing poem. You sir, are going on my favourites list.
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Okay, I love short poems! So I am happy to find the last of yours I read and then this one. Sooo refreshing. I think your author's notes could go in the poem itself
This piece has so many implications - simple and yet powerful; accurate.
Fab!
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this grabbed me intensely... x
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Wow~
This is one Powerful piece my Friend~
also Images that swell the eyes
Oh My Word~ Brevity~~
You rock!!
Bravo!!~
Keep that quill dancing
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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vastness reverberates
the second line has a pulled aside sentiment of a couple from the holding elements in identification making that long term, and yet the last line takes on the title, and by personal reference it becomes a deserting or recomitting though lonely by a toll
almost with wonder now as before to not be maiden not by worry of not being one, but with doubled meaning
it reminds too of my arising to my girl's compliment on my curls from laying on showered hair and how I'd want the curlers of a baby's fingers that were in my dream, but the day rotates differently lately ~
pre...
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So much emotion in ten words.
Amazing piece.
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So sad and stunning in ten...very deep and thought provoking.
Best,
mystic
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