Tattered...
leaflets drizzled,
like acidic rain...
on a stormy Tuesday.
Author notes
prompt is ~ Torn (10 words)
A contest entry
- ~ Torn ~ by Lavender Butterfly.
475 points, ended October 1, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow no wonder a silver
this really gave me goosebumps of sadness
the litter to which...
left you thinking
Well done to you
Julie
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love this... x
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in 10 words you stun me
good thing its wednesday now..lol..but it did rain yesterday...how did you know? hahah..love it! best wishes in LB's contest...great 10 words
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Lovely metaphor and depth...you said so much that leaves one to ponder many thoughts in your brevity...excellent work.
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So much emotion exhibited in 10 small words...very powerful...definitely does wonders for the prompt-torn. This was nicely done. Great job!!!!! Kisses
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a monument of emotion
this has a stretch of ee cummings where I'm paraphrasing 'he too thought he's stood in autumn too long' after the disappearing shows of ruggedness... it's like it's been pulled out
it also has an implication for me of stifling closed inside air for the view so "like acidic rain..." and the last line traces conditions that amassed
strongly as on work day ~
carolyn
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Deep thoughts and emotions come from this write
Its dark, its helpless and sad
Says so much in meaning when only 10 words state how you feel
best wishes
Julie
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