for a brief moment it was summers end

and they played mind games

while making footprints in the snow

catching leaves like it was fall

running through rain like it wasn't wet

guessing where they were in time

before giving it a second thought

they had already given it a third

and it was theirs to game

A contest entry

and I started my poem with the word 'and' by Virgoan. 1500 points, ended October 10, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Virgoan
October 10

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This is okay. Not good but okay. There is a lot of areas of opportunities in this poem. Try left aligning the poem first and see its natural effect on the poem. Just my thought.

Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

Regards,

Hensley
- Bullets
  October 10
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  Thanks for the input.
  <3
  Bullets
Fallen-Thumper
October 3

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i love the imagery in this piece
great job and well written
-penguin-