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the change of sudden

and she waved
like an ocean of happiness
until midnight grew to morning when
in breaking sun the winds of change
had rendered all familiarity impotent

evolution takes a toll on southern comfort
when the storms wear names
sung in choruses by weathermen
and grown from tropical depression


she thought he was
the warm and humid summer
safely tucked in memories
and melody sublime
until the howl that
stripped her trees to bare
and hearts lay
naked in the disarray

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  • Amla
    November 22
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    Thanks for commenting on my poem. I appreciate it. Hha oops for the spelling. Anyway I thought that the last eight lines in this poem were really good. Nice imagery.

  • Virgoan
    October 10

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    The last stanza really punch the reader in its sublime poetic period of thought. I think this poem is good.

    Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

    Regards,

    Hensley


  • AdrinaConti
    October 6

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    I see this as being about change happening all at once without really getting a chance to let it go, or accept that it's happening. It's natural to wish to go back to familiar times, not necessarily better times.

    Thank you for the welcome!


  • sideways hourglass
    September 29

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    i like the ending image best, it's the most poignant. the whole thing entirely is good too, of course.