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The Scolder

A man walking towards me stopped to stare,
No, it wasn't a stare, it was more of a glare.
His faced looked pained, I had no idea why,
Then what flowed from his mouth almost made me cry.

"Oh my God!" he said in a not so pleasant tone,
"You're so ugly and worthless too."
He continued with a phrase that would cut through me,
"There is no place here for people like you!"

"Blacks are nothing,
blacks should be my slaves.
They're lower than street dogs,"
Then he left with a wave.

I stood there in shock,

Complete disarray.
Should I cry?

What should I say?

 

My heart fell to the concrete,

It shattered all around,

Where it was trampled by on-coming feet,

Pounded into the ground.

 

I am worthless? Could he be right?
Should I defend myself or put up a fight?
I felt my soul shutting down, I didn't want to feel,
I'd rather be numb than admit this was real.

How could he be so bold? How could he be so cold?
How could one fathom what I'd just been told?
I have to move on with this chip on my shoulder,
From the random stranger, the hater, the scolder.




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This is not a personal experience. I have had some instances that relate to this, but none of them could measure up to this.

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  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    November 2

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    A man walking towards me stopped to stare,
    No, it wasn't a stare, it was more of a glare.

    Wow, nice Marisa.

    It felt like a conversation in your head, I liked the flow and the message was powerful. Good luck in my contest.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    October 1

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    well expressed. still amazes me the ignorance of some - the scolder's the fool.

    nice writing.


  • BluesMan gold member
    September 29

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    Wow that was a very powerful write. Heart felt and heart breaking at the same time.
    It really upsets me that their is still so much prejudice in this brave new world of cowards! Your poem stired up my emotions.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Bill


  • michael thomas
    September 29

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    I would hope that this poem is simply a typification not a reality, because I tend to fantasize that this type of ignorance is only in the past. If this did actually happen to you or not, the fact that you write of what was once or is still a devastating aberration of human civility, makes all of us who could be unjustly accused of such behavior, feel cheap inside. Indeed, to us, the poets, the facts of injustice always make us feel cheap that we are or could be a distant part of things to terrible to even think of. Thank you for your poem. Thank you for reading my poem. I rated your poem as silver in the judging. I gave gold to torn paper bag. Your words are a worthy effort. Thank you.


  • blueyez
    September 29

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    This is just an example of how ugly people can be. There is no way you or anyone else deserves to be degraded like this and it really makes my blood boil. You are a beautiful young woman and a wonderful artist with your pen! You did a wonderful job conveying the pain and uglyness in this write! Ignorance is not always bliss... keep pennin!


  • jessifer1792
    September 29
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    wow... some people.. This was well written as well as being an overall good read. Good luck.


  • islekine gold member
    September 29

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    Powerful write!

    I enjoyed this! Thanks for sharing your talent...best wishes in the contest and always!
    Write on and on!

    and



    You may judge anytime!


  • Snowbear gold member
    September 29

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    It's sad how some people can be so hurtful, so ignorant. We should only judge a person by the quality of his character. But some people are simply not good people and will take pleasure in hurting others. One thing we can do is to not hate like him. To remember that sting and to treat others how we would wish to be treated.

    It's an effective, powerful poem and I wish you well in the contest.


  • Josette
    September 29
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    I really like this, and would tell you to change a thing!
    Good luck in the contest!

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