There was a time, not long ago,
Where chemistry was dead.
We found out all there was to know,
With nothing new ahead.
No solutions to be seen,
but still we mix and pour.
The same results there's always been:
It's all been mixed before.
Like wizards poised to cast a spell,
Without the magic word.
And still too blind to even tell,
That nothing has occurred.
one night, I stayed up really late,
frustrated with my mind.
I fought so fiercely to create,
and I made quite a find.
I looked upon my little wall,
Where every beaker sits.
A chemical within them all,
I smashed them all to bits.
I don't know how I did it then,
The mixture, so impure.
I couldn't do it all again,
The product will endure.
A secret that I never knew,
I learned that fateful day.
When you're mixing something new,
The structure falls
away...
As I gave it all a stir,
The mixture had a change.
I wanted things back as they were,
For this one just looked... odd.
I think that I will stir it more,
until it's new to me.
Perhaps it's all been mixed before,
but soon.... you'll get to see.
Author notes
Oh author's notes, how I need you this time.
This is a piece I've been wanting to do for a while. I've spent lots of time here on AP and on other places developing my writing style and sharpening my technical skills, but I've gotten very tired with my established forms, perhaps I've run out of things to do with it. I don't know how drastic it will be, but it's time for me to start experimenting with writing in some more interesting styles, although I assume the general content will remain the same. This poem is kind of my way of wrapping my old style up and announcing a new period of experimentation. What I'm saying is maybe this poem is just for me haha.
Perhaps just that little note makes this otherwise mediocre poem make sense. It has some intentionally weak rhymes and some other things I would never do normally. If you would like to read work with unwavering rhythm and rhyme, read my other fifty or so pieces 
Comments
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I love this one. Though I will very much miss this style from you, I look forward to what's coming. Sorry it took so long for me to get to commenting on this piece, I've just been madly busy and insanely tired by the time I actually got to the computer. I'll try to make it an extra good comment to make up for the absence.
As for the structure, it was very well done. It did seem very similar to chemistry. The words and structure weren't necessarily the ones you'd expect reading it, but they still folowed really well. It was an awesome effect. One thing I've noticed with your writing is that you often use your rhyme and structure to further illustrate what you're saying. As for the parts where the structure changed or the rhyme didn't quite fit would bug the crud out of me with nearly any other poet, I know how perfect your's usually is, and it contributed to rather than took from the quality of the poem. Oh how nice it must be to be so far along as a poet to be able to mess around with the rhythm and still have it sound good. Great job with this piece, I look forward to your new, more experimental pieces. 
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this is awesome, probably the smoothest flow iv read in a while, i enjoyed it. keep up the great work
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another perfect piece.
thats really deserving of more comments, in my opinion.
very well done
♥ andi
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