Dearest Jacob,
I dreamed of you last night after receiving your letter. Just reading the words you wrote brought back the images and memories of our last time together. The feeling of your hands on my back as we danced in the living room to the sounds of the slow blues music that you love so much. Candles give off a soft, low light and your eyes burning with desire. Your hands alone convey so much of you to me when they touch my skin. Slowly sliding down my arms to wrap gently around my waist, then pulling me against your body so that your lips can play on my neck as we danced.
I can feel your body slowly rubbing against mine creating such a delicious frisson of heat. Heat that slowly burns into me in order to light the embers that still glow from our afternoon playtime. Your lips tease, caress and are joined by your teeth and tongue. Nipping and then swirling to take away the sting. As my head drops back to your shoulder I am once more captive to the scent of you as your lips begin a subtle dance with mine.
Your hands begin a slow worshipping dance over my body as we continue to sway to the music. Nothing hurried, just the two of us and the music we love. My fingers entangle with yours as you caress me. A slow burn of desire has started and both of us are caught in the middle of it.
Still held close to you, our hands begin sliding upwards, finding, cupping and teasing my breast. The other pair slides downward finding the juncture of my thighs. Rubbing and pressure bring the whimpers from deep inside as we play my body like a fine instrument. I am your viola, held close and played by a master. We continue to tease my body until I am gasping and sobbing in need for you. Together we unbutton my jeans and my fingers release yours as you delve deeper. Your fingers find the heat and wetness waiting and with one long thrust, you send me into ecstacy again.
I wake wet and knowing that you have once more touched me through space and time in order to let me know that you love me. I miss you so much and time passes too slowly for me until you come home.
My darling, please take care of yourself and your men that are fighting so bravely so that you can all come home.
I love you so much,
Marissa
Author notes
Inspiration: A Letter to a Soldier
In a list
A contest entry
- The Erotic Challenge SEASON 10 (round 2) by Master Ktulu.
450 points, ended October 7, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow, this almost made me cry. A very well deserved gold, congratulations. Looking forward to reading more of your work in the challenge.
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I am sure there are many a solider who have received such letters from the women they have left behind but I doubt any have received one written as enticingly well as this one here. Your words singe the page upon which it is printed as it does the mind of the one reading it. You have hit all the right notes to a sensual poetic song I do enjoy so much.
spelling/grammar/punctuation- 19
As excellent as your spelling, grammar and punctuation was I only have one small teeny tiny oops and that is the following line:
'Just reading the words you wrote brought back the images and memories of our last time together.'
I do believe you should have a comma after the word 'wrote' so it would read as follows:
'Just reading the words you wrote, brought back the images and memories of our last time together.'
In my opinion, it makes a break leaving room for a sigh which I believe if one was reliving such sensations and experiences they would sigh in delight and in longing.
presentation/creativity-20
This was flawless for me.
how well you handled the challenge - 20
"grab me" effect -19
You certainly held my attention throughout and even reminded me of some letters I have written in the past.
overall-20
total score : 98 -
Sorry for the delay in judging.
As a piece of erotic fiction this so sensually hot and intimate, I just wish it hadn't been in the format of a letter as that has made feel a little uncomfortable as if invading someone's privacy. It is a beautifully crafted piece all the same with scintillating imagery.
Well Done
CC
Score 95/100
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I am awestruck reading this letter. I have no other words to say.
grab me=20 from start to finish
spelling/grammar=20
presentation=20
how well you handled the challenge=20
overall=20
total=100 -
Nice letter to send or receive depends on which one you are. Love to read letters like this. Best of luck in the challenge.
Riftkin
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Absolutely beautiful. Very well written and I feel that you really did justice to my title.
spelling/grammar/punctuation- 20
Wonerful word usage here. Spelling and grammar both used perfectly.
presentation/creativity-20
Some beautiful imagery. Well done!
how well you handled the challenge-20
You really took this title beyond expectations.
"grab me" effect -20
As I read this I felt like it was a response to the initial write that I did. Only in another time..lol
overall-20
Perfect job!
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Total- 100
**Master Ktulu**
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I'm your viola, held close and played by a master...
Excellent line...excellent erotica...
You're lovable, love!
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that is that kind of image that any man will walk out of hell just to feel. lol, that kind of sensation that grows ther more you think about it, keep it flowing
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Wow..
This is beautiful...turned me on..and put sex on my fingertips..
very nicely done
It's very sweet..if that girl were me, id be very...very...very poise and..grateful to be with a guy who knows how to...make a girl moan *LOL*
~oh no...I can't hide his kiss..
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