Your favorite sport was to sit around a coffee table in a wall-less room and try to roll the dice until all the numbers get erased and you'd lose the count of the sum you've been calculating.
I tried to warn you, give you hints. I even once placed my hair on the wooden surface and asked you to count the number of my hairs instead, but you just looked away and murmured:
'You're too ugly'
Ever since that day and I've had a small crack across my forehead, it runs down below my chin and reachs the tips of my fingers.
I never knew what beauty meant until I met you and I never realized what ugliness looked like until you spoke. Wonder where you've learned these piercing words; mom says in a school called 'life'.
Whether I disagree with her or not, you'll just keep rolling that dice believing that numbers is all that matters in this world; I've seen the coloured papers you send to the bank and I know how they smell.
They smell decay and they smell exactly like the scent I sniff when I cry,
the scent that runs out in drops from my crack,
the crack your numbered words created.
(C)Noor 9/29/2009
Author notes
Contest prompt:
20 lines [Prose preffered] on prompt: fractured
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a gold
no surprise
wow!
what can I say
you've got talent!!!
AMAZING CREATIVE MIND NOOR
God bless you my friend...
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Congrats...
This was an amazingly penned piece you deserve gold... diamond or platinum if they had it.
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i really really really liked this piece
you did a stunning job expressing the emotion
creating a story and showing it loud in clear
i even grew attached to
thank you very very much for entering. -
Cleverly penned on the Prompt!
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Poignant
This feels like gold to me.
wishing you the best, poet.
till then
stay
liquid
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U jist vayt mein lytl vun
I vil kot U - zen U vil haf meny kraks akros ur 4hed - heee heee heee - ho ho - U kan hyd if u vat - but I vil findingk you - haaa haaa heee - zen u vil be mein frau - nice story Noor - good luck in the contest - u haf no ver to hyd - Bone crushing hugs - Stalker Joe -
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very nice telling. I love your emotion and severe points.
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