I hate elevators, they’re a boring place to be
I don’t look at others, and they don’t look at me
You must look ahead, or watch the numbers change
No “hello how are you” or any such exchange
I have fun with people now, at least while trapped in there
Turn loose the inner beast, and give them all a scare
Now I drive folks batty when they see me do my thing
I’ll say something off the wall or just stand there and sing
I let the doors close fully, and look them in the eye
Give them my best smile and say “there’re stars up in the sky”
Maybe I’ll just tell them that I have on brand new socks
Then they look right at me like my head is full of rocks
My favorite one to use, still puts them to the test
I’m waiting for a cop say you’re now under arrest
I love it more than anything because I know they cannot flee
I tell them they’re just jealous because the voices talk to me
Author notes
Image credit: Photobucket
A contest entry
- ...Shut Up Voices... by Desire.
1221 points, ended October 4, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any suggestions and comments are welcome
Comments
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Thank You!
Thank You for Your entry: Elevator Rides
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~
I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
You took the prompt and brought forth much for the Mind to feast upon~
Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
Woven Strengths: OMG
Wow
j/k...said that because of the
ending
but Heck the Voices talk to me all the time and I give them a
Q-tip probing if they continually persist~ they see Mr. Q...and Silencio
until a later date while reading I kept getting images of a person basically
standing in an elevator and staring at the other occupants...back to the
elevator door Now that is one creepy image~
Adore the rhyme...
I am shown OMG~ Mr. Bean rolls on the floor laughing...
Imagine him standing and staring- making faces
I think that says it all Also Rowan Atkinson in Rat Race
However that is to be Interpreted.
You give the Reader much to think about
Love the direction You took with this prompt
Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense
Powerful verse and message You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
I let the doors close fully, and look them in the eye
Give them my best smile and say “there’re stars up in the sky”
Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Many blessings too 
with much love and light~ Desire~*~
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Thank you dear heart for your kind words, for hosting and for the Gold you bestowed upon this piece.
It's always a pleasure to write for you.
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Congratulations!! You had me rolling and Thank You for taking the time to enter my contest for I am Honored
Hope You are having a Magnificent night busy bee~
Woot~
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lmao rofle lol and all the rest awesome bravo u rock this is soooooooooo funny
i love your work
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Thanks my friend. Glad it brought forth a giggle or two.
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Good take on the prompt. I thought it was peculiarly English not speaking in lifts or on trains. I often want to come out with something silly just to see the reaction.
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Thanks so much. I finally decided life is just too short to worry about whether people think I'm silly. I really do try these things on people just to see what they'll do. Besides, I'll probably never see them again and what's the worst they can do? They can't eat me.
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Excellent ! A delightfully funny poem Paul !! Lol //
Very elevating and uplifting' - to read ,
Brought a smile to my day , for sure ...
Best regards , Friend Easy
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Thanks my friend. As always, I appreciate your comments. Glad you got a chuckle.
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LMAO
Brilliant take on the prompt
Very Hilarious and Clever
Your rhyme and flow is great as well
Wish you the very best in the contest
Take care my friend
David
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Thank you kindly. Always happy to provide a laugh when I can.
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My brother once said in a 'loud whisper' that he accidently just dropped his mouse and was scared that someone would step on it and asked me if I would help him find it while we were on a overly crowed elevator. I could have killed him because more than half of the occupants were women and the screams about tore my eardrums. The very first stop we about got trampled to death, I wanted to knock the crap out of him and all he could do was laugh. It was funny later when I thought about it, but at the time, I just wanted to kill him! ( and no, he had no mouse with him, it was all a prank!)
Loved your poem, humor is your forte. Best of luck in the contest my friend.
Suzi
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LOL
Your brother sounds like my kinda guy.
Thanks for reading and for your continued support.
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“there’re stars up in the sky” - This one reminded me of the lyrics by the Talking Heads - "There's water at the bottom of the ocean".
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It's the goofy shock factor that gets em. No one ever knows what to say. They just stand there in nervous silence and leave with great haste when the doors open. Sometimes, not even at their intended floor.
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