The girl she took my hand in hers
The girl
The girl
The girl she took my hand in hers
My fingers she kissed them one by one
My fingers
My fingers
My fingers she kissed them one by one
My heart it began to flutter inside
My heart
My heart
My heart it began to flutter inside
My hand it moved to caress her silky skin
My hand
My hand
My hand it moved to caress her silky skin
Her lips they look so delicious to me
Her lips
Her lips
Her lips they look so delicious to me
Her eyes they glisten with pure delight
Her eyes
Her eyes
Her eyes they glisten with pure delight
Wanting her to be mine always
Wanting
Wanting
Wanting her to be mine always
Author notes
Written on 8th April 2004 at 00:35 GMT
Okay, I apologise that it's not really obvious that this is a same-sex thing. Unless you know that I'm a girl. Uh.... yeah. I'm a girl and this is about a girl.
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A contest entry
- The 'Gifted' Ones (Contest) by bdunk.
400 points, ended July 22, 2004, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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LOL, actually I'm bisexual. This poem was for a special lady who turned my head. I'm in a long term relationship with a guy I love very much.
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grrrrreat!
ARE U A LEZZE?
no offense if you are...
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Well done
I like your effort very much. I do see rhythmn and that in itself is a rhyming flow. It's different and unique -
by no means do you suck!!! This is a wonderful write!! It is well written and beautiful. No matter the rhyme or not....I enjoyed your shylea...
Sam
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Yeah I know, I suck.... I was too busy gettin the syllable structure right that I forgot about the rhymes. I suck.
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There were supposed to be some rhyming in this...a nice write though.
Thank you for entering.
Sam
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Hehehehehehe, I'm all blushy now! Thank you LosingHope for yer fabulous comment. That's the ego boost I needed.
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Wicked Write
The way you repeated the beginning of the line made it even more effective and added to how much your emotions were expressed in the piece. It was a great write and I hope you never stop writing. You are so talented and your way with words and your talent really shine through in your writing. It doesn't matter whether or not you got it perfect, poetry doesn't have to perfect, and you are so near to perfection...your writing is beautiful. -
i like how you wrote this poem...very different but good. shows that you really feel this way is how i take it..thanks for sharing
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