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wet cough

I feel like an accidental
Breath
A chromatic thump
Thick with questions and
Shaky mouth sounds

Table scrap girl
Eats blue beats
And over-ripe
Seconds drip
From a
Broken faucet
Somewhere up
There

I'm here.
Mostly solid
Grinding teeth,
Coercing the sun.

Silence feels
Like pressure
On my right foot.
Artificial blood
In my right ear.

Creaks of
Doors
I didn't open
And words spoken
From a mouth
Made of
Other mouths speaking.

Day time eyes
Overlooked night skies,
And bridges boil
Just below the
Skin.

Tar clings to me
Like an orphan
And I fill
My teeth with
Hollow hands
For the sake of
Moving particles and
Off-white
Feathers,
Once used for
Sight

lemme know what you think.

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  • Naridill
    October 15
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    Your words sex my mind.


  • solarjinx
    September 29

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    holy shit. I'm in a hurry to leave for work and I didn't expect to find a poem this terrific waiting to be read, I'm going to have to come back home later today and give this another read (or three).

    My first over-all impression: THIS is why you are on my favorites list.


  • sleep artist
    September 29

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    "I feel like an accidental
    Breath
    A chromatic thump
    Thick with questions and
    Shaky mouth sounds

    Table scrap girl
    Eats blue beats
    And over-ripe
    Seconds drip
    From a
    Broken faucet
    Somewhere up
    There

    I'm here.
    Mostly solid
    Grinding teeth,
    Coercing the sun."

    i had no words but the subtle sound of love for this bit
    really i think the best i've read on this site since i've been here
    it is so pure and so powerful, particularly the last bit, "mostly solid grinding teeth, coercing the sun", you've captured something only the soul knows how to capture

    you've made my whole year as far as poertry is concerned, i just love it