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an unsound poet

thoughts come into mind

too unusual to make sense

too beautiful to be real

nothing seems to fit together

as the world closes in

then becomes as a blank page

 

i try to hold on to words

but they’re too elusive

they taunt as they slither off

into an abyss of black and gray

daring what was real a moment ago

to speak out, to scream of nothingness

 

come back sweet thoughts

calm my twisting brain

hold me in the arms of your embrace

make me feel your strength

your message waiting to be heard

let me savor you for just a moment

 

then, just as i start to fall into my trap

the place i’ve created with my wasted thoughts

i see ahead that lovely place

where those thoughts have risen

and the world finally can know

my mind wasn’t so wasted after all

 

dee garner

©september 28, 2009

  

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Just some thoughts which slithered into my mind

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  • penman gold member
    November 10

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    Wonderful

    A very creative and well writtn poem. thank you so much for sharing


  • waydownuponjoy
    November 2

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    I can appreciate ...

    exactly what you've shared in this thought-full poem ... as a fellow poet I know how this works and it never ceases to amaze me. Out-of-the-blue a thought will pop into my head and then I'll think, oh that's sweet - or I'll be sure to remember that one and carry on with the theme! But come time to get it all down on paper and that very same thought finds itself fliting around the flowers like a butterfly that can't seem to find one where the nectar hasn't already been sucked dry ! Very nicely done! j y


  • ZachP gold member
    October 21

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    oh, Dee . . .
    these thoughts that just "slither" into your mind
    are one hundred percent pure gold!

    this isn't "an unsound poet"
    just a poet

    (I think the "unsound" is a given for most of us)

    Blessed be, and thank you for sharing,
    Zach Estel.


  • individuality gold member
    October 11

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    to speak out, to scream of nothingness - ah yes, we do this all the time as poets, hear me, hear my screams, and the whispers i set free next to your ear. each syllable a seduction of words.


  • Wesley Storer
    October 6

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    Unsound? Never!

    Twould be no hope for anyone! I happen to know from personal experience that ladies who like cats are very powerful in the cosmic scheme of things and carry tremendous Karma! It is my good fortune to be in the light of your acquaintance. Best Wishes and happy Autumn Trails. Do you come North for the Autumn colors? Are you still without a kitty?


    • catz Moderators member
      October 6
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      Thank you, Wesley You always make me feel good about my poems.
      We don't come up to Washington except once in awhile like last summer. I wish we could spend the whole summer up there. We drove up last summer, spent 3 weeks there and loved every minute of it, rain and all.
      Yep, I'm still without a kitty and I still miss mine two so much. I wish I could get two more just like them.
      Dee


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    October 5

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    oops...didn't get a hug but got a grin...need to go to school for emoticons

  • J aime Coudre silver member
    October 5
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    How do you do it!!!

    Interesting how you can take "writer's block" and turn it into such a beautiful poem...Most of us would give a lot to be so blocked...Great piece sis...sorry I don't get over more often...but you know how my life goes...

    I really do love this poem...it will be listed as one of my favorites...in fact I think I will create a Favories' favorite List

    Love ya..

    now let me see if my memory remembers how to do a hug...


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 3

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    Excellent write honey

    I love this and yes you sure at times we all fdeel a bit sligted untill our minds wonders off into the place of serenity and love and beauty


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 3

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    this is so beautiful i am so happy i stopped
    by to read , this is precious,

    with love and blessings

    Rend


  • poetryality silver member
    October 3

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    I can never imagine you mind being wasted. Every single word in the English language can be come a poem, and even some in foreign tongues. I do however understand from whence these words erupt. I like the last stanza because it makes me know that all is never lost. Great poem Dee. It gave me something to be ever grateful for. I don't know that writer's block or the lack of things to write has ever really haunted me. Whenever there was a day that I did not write something, it was out of choice or forgetfulness. I guess that's what the "unsound poet" means, huh? LOL

    You keep spilling ink love.


    Always ♥

    Renee

  • shortyjo
    October 1

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    Very cool. We all know that feeling.


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    October 1

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    beautifully written Dee

  • Just4u
    September 30

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    Being we are a dual nature, there is a place for both. We may choose to life in the place of harmony, but it is the chaos that stirs the pot allowing the words to re-congeal into a new form, thus taking us and others to a place we have both
    never been before and thereby elevating all of us up another rung on the ladder
    of completion...


    Eddy


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 29

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    I think far too much is made out of so-called "normality", Dee. Who decided what "sound" is, and how sound were they? Keep penning, Poet. One suggestion, though; you might consider changing the color of your font, as it kinda faded into the background a bit.




  • individuality gold member
    September 29
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  • An Old Codger gold member
    September 29

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    A beautiful description of the poetic mind and writing process.
    So well written Dee. Bravo!!!


  • Kastor
    September 29

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    This makes me happy. I've seen this in action but never really had the words right to describe it in poetry. This is really nice.


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    September 29

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    Well, they slithered triumphantly,
    defeating the nothingness and
    appearing poetically on the page!!

    "that lovely place"---what a great definition
    of that moment when it all comes together!



    Score:
    blank page---zero
    Catz----------the winner!


    M-C

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