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Ribbons

I've come undone
I'm simply ribbons again
You've finally won
I got caught up in your wind

Yeah you blew me away,
And I wrapped myself around you for safety
But now you're taking your escape
And I'm clinging on to all that you've left me

So I'll flail against the wind
When you release your grip
Tangle myself in the next thing that gets in my way
And in my panic
I'll practice detachment
Because nothing ever wants me to stay

I've come undone
I'm simply ribbons again
You've finally won
I got caught up in your wind

Author notes

I don't know why I thought of ribbons, but it seemed fitting, and I enjoyed the imagery, so I built on it and this is what I got

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  • chchap12
    September 29
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    really good, ribbons do fit with the imagery. Good write