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Anything but Feelings

I'm just a simple romantic
trying to find my way through grass and pavement,

A helping hand is only a hand of another
So help me out when it comes to you and some other.

The eyes of the person over there
have never been so personal
until you let them know about your personel.

Lend me your heart
and I'll lend you something back
what you had in mind was a new start

Here we go
This was way long over-due
I need you to know I love you

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  • Jaded Juliet
    October 1

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    This is great!! Way to go. I really really like it. I think on this like, "until you let them know about your personel," could do without the about. It sounds better to me. But that's just me. Great poem.


  • Serene Rose
    September 30
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    doesnt really flow too well but it has a good subject to it i like the grass and pavement part though haha, i dont know why.


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    September 28

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    Trying to find my way through grass and pavement
    I LOVE that line, so true of all of us.
    Thanks for sharing!

    Keep writing!

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